remembering you, again
sitting on edge,drenched in rain
i despise thought of suicide
but i dread more living through pain
apprehensive life,contemptuos soul
unworthy emotions as feasting ghoul
day and night they eat me inside
fill that hollow with pain and loathe...
i fill my mind with joyous disguise
but cloak of dark brings in surprise
tormented thoughts of creating divide
lose life, shed inhibitions inspite
i don't want to die but i'm dead already
losing my sleep,my heart so steady
relentless in grave,engraving nails
holding onto misery,feels so heady
burn my heart,my soul,my life
throw my ashes on seashore wind
for i may find solace,peace and rest
where memories and moments intertwine...
Author Note: some random thoughts.....the picture is taken from Google Images.....
Please let me know any areas of awkwardness ....
13 comments:
Come on. You hate pain, or are you scared of it? Good writeup, anyway.
nice poem
@arjit..thanks for the comments...well everybody hates pain..or is scared of it...anyways the poem is written from the picture prompt..thanks a lot for your comments...i appreciate that..
@G...thanks for your feeedback...i appreciate that
ah ..that was heart wrenching and quite painful .. and the picture prompted to write this ? then i must admit this was too good, there was more maturity in your writing and the choice of words and flowing emotions as also appreciative . Kudos my friend ! :) Its really wonderful , honestly .
@Aarti...thanks a lot for your invaluable feedback..i really appreciate your comments...thanks for the read again...
Good luck on your blog! Happy New Year!!!
@Irene...thanks a lot for your feedback...i appreciate that
Love and Pain goes hand in hand!!
Keep writing.
Thank u for reviewing my blog :-). I hope u do drop in often there!
Though Love creates pain...it helps a become strength his mind and character....
I like your way of expression which evokes some sense of closeness to your poetry...
Nice write....
@ Ranjini...thanks a lot ..i am glad you liked it...
@ Meena...ofcourse i would love to whenever i can...
@ Manoj...thanks a lot buddy...i appreciate your feedback...thanks for the comments..
You hate Pain not because of Love, but because of being away from your Love; the separation is painful. Love is a kind and "overwhelming" expression, isn't it..
Well, we don't debate here :) Beautifully painful.
This one is for you, for writing this piece.
If someone should hurt me with words.. may the words be yours.
- Fish
~@fish...thanks a lot..
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